Solicitation Text needed...

[imported_Rasyr]

Working on the solicitation text for Novus, and I could use a few inspirational ideas... 

The Laundry
Game Line: The Laundry
Category: Rulebook
Retail Price: $39.99
Size: 288 pages, Hardcover, 8.5" x 11"
Interior Art: B&W
Author: Gareth Hanrahan, Jason Durall, John Snead
Stock Code: CB71200
ISBN: 978-1-907204-93-7

CAPITAL LAUNDRY SERVICES - WHAT NEEDS TO BE CLEANED UP?

There are things out there, in the weirder reaches of space-time where reality is an optional extra. Horrible things, usually with tentacles. Al-Hazred glimpsed them, John Dee summoned them, HP Lovecraft wrote about them, and Alan Turing mapped the paths from our universe to theirs. The right calculation can call up entities from other, older universes, or invoke their powers. Invisibility? Easy! Animating the dead? Trivial! Binding lesser demons to your will? Easily doable!

Opening up the way for the Great Old Ones to come through and eat our brains? Unfortunately, much too easy.

That's where the Laundry comes in - it's a branch of the British secret service, tasked to prevent hideous alien gods from wiping out all life on Earth (and more particularly, the UK). You work for the Laundry. The hours are long, the pay is sub-par, the co-workers are... interesting (in the Chinese curse sense of the word), and the bureaucracy is stifling - but you do get to wave basilisk guns and bullet wards around, and to go on challenging and exciting missions to exotic locations like quaint, legend-haunted Wigan, cursed Slough and Wolverhampton where the walls are thin.

You may even get to save the world - just make sure you get a receipt.

Basically, I need to figure out what to say in the paragraphs along the bottom here....

All suggestions welcome!!

[samwise7]

I would think the back of the Novus rulebook would be a good start at least and then go from there?

[imported_Rasyr]

That is what I am doing at the moment  -- I was hoping oyu guys might say something that sparks an additional idea or two...

[Fidoric]

A quick thought: a comparison with modern softwares; something like
"A powerful gaming engine with user-friendly interface: streamlined rules that allow to cope with any gaming situation".

Other thoughts:
- Let no rule stand between you and your gaming pleasure.
- Novus offers you comprehensive but unobtrusive rules.
- Novus is both simple and powerful enough for beginners to grasp in no time and for veteran gamers to deal with any situation ever encountered.

Another point you might want to stress is the possibility offered to players to influence directly the course their character's action. The boons & snags is something I think you have to put forward, especially the fact that the players use them as they see fit.

I will give it some more thoughts ASAP.

[imported_Witchking20k]

Do the training manual approach.  "As your introduction to Laundry operations make sure to familliarize yourself with the official training manual........"  then have a form included that the players have to sign 5 copies of....and the GM must sign.......and they have to wait ten days for background checks before they can play....and you're basically accurately roleplaying the government process.

[imported_Rasyr]

I went with the left hand side of the back cover text as the solicitation text...

I really needed to get it off to Angus yesterday, and I finally did...